"When Drego's journey to stop the evil conqueror Gordar takes him far from home, he finds himself in the company of a headstrong young woman and a darker part of himself he didn't know existed."I just think that makes it sound a little cleaner. Good luck with this! Sounds like fun.
This is a well-written logline (though I agree with Authoress about cleaning it up even more). I feel like it lacks specifics, though or maybe that I've seen something similar in the past that makes this feel less original than it probably is.Good luck and happy writing!~Dannie
This is great. I like Authoress's suggestion. You could also maybe state Drego's age.Good luck!
I too ditto Authoress's suggestion.
I like the tightness of this but would love if you could give us a sense of location somehow in just a couple extra words. Good luck!