Saturday, October 27, 2012

BD One Last Chance Logline #40

TITLE: Something Rich and Strange
GENRE: YA Science Fiction

Seventeen-year-old Hannah "Sasquatch" Bloom thinks her height is the only unusual thing about her until a boy arrives at her school to awaken her to the truth: she's an alien, like him.  Now she must choose between helping her race colonize the planet and projecting the humans she loves.

6 comments:

  1. Interesting story! You can add a bit of romantic interest, if it's in your story, along the lines of this:

    ...until a drop-dead gorgeous giant of a boy arrives at her school to awaken her to the truth: she's an alien, like him. Now she must choose between helping him and the rest of her race colonize the planet -- or protect the humans she loves.

    BTW, tiny typo in original text, should be "protecting."

    Best wishes!

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  2. I felt like I wanted more specifics here. How tall is she being the main one. Is she freakishly tall for a girl or for any teenager? Give us some more little details to spice it up. What kind of colonizing are we talking about?

    Good luck and happy writing!
    ~Dannie (#13)

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  3. I think this is great. Love the voice and it's concise. I also love the title.

    Good luck!

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  4. Well, at least she wasn't badgered to join the basketball team.:)

    Fun story! And great logline. I like it as is, with the typo corrected, of course, but I think Skywriter's tweak gives it more oomph!

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  5. I like it how it is, but would also love to see it with skywriter's suggestion. Sounds like a great story!

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  6. Thanks so much for your suggestions! I also like skywriter's additions!
    One hair shy of six-two, seventeen-year-old Hannah "Sasquatch" Bloom thinks her height is the only unusual thing about her until a gorgeous boy arrives at her school to awaken her to the truth: she's an alien, like him. Now she must choose between helping him and the rest of her race colonize the planet and protecting the humans she loves.

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