tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post6105314945554905578..comments2023-04-23T16:33:39.062-04:00Comments on K.T. Crowley: Logline #9K.T. Crowleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08211266985396588133noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-23631544528908982182011-10-18T17:11:38.146-04:002011-10-18T17:11:38.146-04:00This is really nicely written, but the stakes coul...This is really nicely written, but the stakes could be raised. What is the danger? e.g. ...'but their fight for freedom is met with (terrible event) and if they don't learn who's in control of their lives soon, they may face (second terrible event). Sounds interesting though : )Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-36116078117788580272011-10-18T10:48:16.464-04:002011-10-18T10:48:16.464-04:00Woo, steamy! This had a surprising twist, and make...Woo, steamy! This had a surprising twist, and makes me wonder if they'll plot to kill hubby, sort of like the movie, "Bound." I'm not sure about the last couple of lines either. If you're implying that THEY are really in control of their lives, it's entirely different from another character. So my guess is, those lines are too vague.Gail Shepherdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16998497900316232330noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-16771010220183027192011-10-17T22:39:17.196-04:002011-10-17T22:39:17.196-04:00This sounds very interesting, I'd like to read...This sounds very interesting, I'd like to read more!<br /><br />I'd consider changing it to "until they learn who's really controlling their lives." Also, I'm not sure I like the last question. It may be the fact that I'm sleepy, but it took me a minute to figure out what lesson you were referring to.<br /><br />Hope this helps. Good luck! :)K.T. Crowleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08211266985396588133noreply@blogger.com