tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post6571229363566135647..comments2023-04-23T16:33:39.062-04:00Comments on K.T. Crowley: July Anything #4K.T. Crowleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08211266985396588133noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-55348004530911140432012-08-02T14:09:37.242-04:002012-08-02T14:09:37.242-04:00I agree with Joseph. This is a very intriguing lo...I agree with Joseph. This is a very intriguing logline. I would take out the, "the driver of the car and situation". I don't think the logline needs it and we will learn this when we read the story. <br /><br />I would read the first 5 pages. Great Job!S.A. Husseyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16454457235580594733noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-42866383782681825982012-07-27T16:28:20.198-04:002012-07-27T16:28:20.198-04:00I agree that this is a very intriguing logline, bu...I agree that this is a very intriguing logline, but I wonder if the sentences could be rearranged to create a stronger one with less ambiguity in regards to Triss as the "driver of the car and situation."Joseph Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12712270182152823454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-87404366189174074312012-07-27T13:31:12.785-04:002012-07-27T13:31:12.785-04:00I totally love this logline! It paints an intrigin...I totally love this logline! It paints an intriging picture. I do like Miller's idea for the beginning.CarolineFrye.blogspot.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00158333641073753659noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-67504039963984929262012-07-26T17:25:40.554-04:002012-07-26T17:25:40.554-04:00This is very compelling. You've made every wor...This is very compelling. You've made every word count. I'm hooked!Sarah Floydhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11202671048418865629noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-37053350690302812922012-07-26T15:57:45.741-04:002012-07-26T15:57:45.741-04:00I keep saying I love this entire thing. I curious ...I keep saying I love this entire thing. I curious as to how Triss is the driver of the situation? Is the party important, or could you just open with '...after a twisted bet sparked desire and revenge, one teen is dead'? I love the last line.<br /><br />Great job!L.M. Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05834881688010514126noreply@blogger.com