tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post7564553087621994595..comments2023-04-23T16:33:39.062-04:00Comments on K.T. Crowley: BD One Last Chance Logline #44K.T. Crowleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08211266985396588133noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-80488022933216077342012-11-01T15:31:10.099-04:002012-11-01T15:31:10.099-04:00Love it! My only question is whether this is upper...Love it! My only question is whether this is upper MG instead of YA...but obv can't tell w/o having read any of it. Robyn Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01419207395478885010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-68868211674081374222012-10-28T02:55:45.871-04:002012-10-28T02:55:45.871-04:00This is so great! Ditto on pulling the suffering b...This is so great! Ditto on pulling the suffering bit, but the rest is awesome. I want to read this so badly, now!Juliahttp://www.juliathewritergirl.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-52678492897496119842012-10-27T23:28:54.300-04:002012-10-27T23:28:54.300-04:00I love this concept! I agree that you don't ne...I love this concept! I agree that you don't need the suffering bit. The rest so strong on its own. <br /><br />Good luck! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05644876333491637942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-48794930329256246342012-10-27T18:21:38.853-04:002012-10-27T18:21:38.853-04:00I love this. But the second sentence is run-on. ...I love this. But the second sentence is run-on. I'd break it up between "suffering he's caused/when the publishing company." I agree with the above entries about economy of words. <br /><br />Great concept!katecwritesnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-55979828835389394632012-10-27T16:45:21.867-04:002012-10-27T16:45:21.867-04:00I've seen this before too and love it. I hope ...I've seen this before too and love it. I hope an agent snatches it up.<br /><br />I also agree with deleting the part about the suffering. By saying he's struggling, it's implied. It would also serve to tighten this up a little.<br /><br />Great job and best wishes.Carmenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01502915116446772081noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-83413601429181972172012-10-27T13:04:21.963-04:002012-10-27T13:04:21.963-04:00I love this. A lot. I remember watching this on Pi...I love this. A lot. I remember watching this on Pitch Live and laughing out loud. I would just cut the part in between "as a murderer" and "and when" You don't need the part about the suffering. Great job!<br /><br />Good luck!Authoress Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14384597436791803105noreply@blogger.com